SO I NEED YOU TO EDIT AND WRITE A RESULT/CONCLUSION SECTION ABOUT TOPIC THAT I ALREADY WROTE ABOUT IT
THE TOPIC IS
HERE IS THE COMMNETS I NEED YOU TO ADD TO THE DISSCUSION SECTION.
Extending a paper usually means thinking about organizing a paper. Right now you have one paragraph that states your position and gives information about relative brain sizes, and another one about gender-related “differences” being more cultural than biological.
I’d like to see you break out the first paragraph into two. The first could really be just a sentence or two that identifies your argument. The second would be a more specific discussion of the differences in size between male and female brains — you had lots of good specific details, with numerical data and specific locations in the brain. These would be very appealing to your intended audience.
Then you would spend another paragraph identifying the reasons why you don’t see those physical distinctions as being important (something you’ve mentioned earlier). You wrote in earlier work on this paper about the variations between individual brains and why that is more important that gender-based distinctions. That would be appropriate to both your audience and your position, and it would allow you to offer more evidence, increasing your credibility and the reader’s confidence in your argument.
** LOOK ON ATTACHED 3 AND EDIT IT BASED ON ATTACHED 2 AND ADD MORE FROM ATTACHED 1.
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